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Post by Goblin King on Apr 1, 2005 20:39:42 GMT
Make your own Haikus Syllables 5 / 7/ 5 (you can cheat with dipthongs: whe-el, ma-il can be 1 or 2 I say) Here's one I thought of yesterday:  (Feel free to add own Haikus - regardless of quality  ) |
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 1, 2005 20:50:48 GMT
Here's another fairly random one: Cell phone: ring ring ring!
Yeah, u got it, c u there.
Voice mail? No credit! ;D |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 4, 2005 1:37:59 GMT
it is two forty so why am i still awake? alas, i know not. lol, i gave it a go  |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 4, 2005 2:17:39 GMT
oh i wish i could
write an effective haiku
at this here moment
the awe of 24
will be watched by rob always
with the aid of string
for fear of bad dreams
i will hesitate to sleep
plagued by restlessness
small, gold and fishy
we mourn the loss of little dave
now in goldfish heav'n
poked with a steel spoon
whilst drinking hot chocolate
straight in the eye. ouch.
i cry not, to you
for fear of pain in return
my proof of weakness
inevitable
as day will follow the night
i will turn to you
hang my head in shame
forgot to email Will with
photobucket thanks
this aching sadness
pain of your absence with
haunting resemblence
i will talk rubbish
all night if you will let me
so here i shall stop
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 4, 2005 9:34:33 GMT
Cool Jo  I think you've fully explored the limits of the medium of Haikus lol. (although we must chat about a few of these ) Hope you got to sleep eventually.  GK/W x |
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Post by dk223 on Apr 4, 2005 18:10:10 GMT
the awe of 24 will be watched by rob always with the aid of string lol nice one |
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 4, 2005 18:16:11 GMT
Hey there, I was wondering if that was about you. |
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Post by dk223 on Apr 4, 2005 18:30:20 GMT
hehehe yup she made me watch 24 and now im hooked on the damn thing |
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 4, 2005 18:36:24 GMT
Phew.
Thats a relief - I thought it meant you were watching HER 24/7. ;D
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Post by jodunford on Apr 4, 2005 18:38:44 GMT
i thought i heard people talking about me sorry for those early morning rambles, it is surprisingly therapeutic thinking them up thou rob! get back to your dvds! honestly 
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 4, 2005 18:45:55 GMT
;D ;D
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Post by dk223 on Apr 4, 2005 19:48:11 GMT
rob! get back to your dvds! honestly *salutes* yes ma'am |
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Post by Tinkerbell on Apr 4, 2005 21:34:35 GMT
Goblin market is,
Where the mystical hang out,
Dare you meet us there?
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 4, 2005 23:31:36 GMT
Goblin market is, Where the mystical hang out, Dare you meet us there? Maybe there is great wisdom and insight to be found in Haikus after all. ;D |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 5, 2005 0:01:37 GMT
how rob stopped watching
the fantastic 24
i will never know
i am determined
to sit here with this boredom
for this one last time
from here on i shall
with intense precision
think before speaking
to learn to express
an art mastered by many
but not by myself
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 5, 2005 0:10:35 GMT
;D ;D Better away, I, Before Jo sends me crazy Lol-ing me to death ;D ;D |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 6, 2005 1:25:03 GMT
;D
this good behaviour,
unsuspecting innocence.
It plagues me with doubt.
i wish that the wind
would stop blowing the damn door
it's driving me nuts
i fear the dark nights;
afraid that you will visit
destroying sweet dreams
infuriating,
how my words cannot express.
resort to actions
s_rry for being so negative!
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 6, 2005 20:08:44 GMT
But Jo - These are good! Broad and emotive, much like Japanese brush strokes |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 9, 2005 16:37:42 GMT
smooooooooooth damnit i wish that bournemouth had won the football oh, disappointment |
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 9, 2005 20:28:38 GMT
Excellent use of "disappointment" - four syllables It's like Scrabble of something. Its a battle between being clever with long words or minimalist with short words. Reminded me of a couple I did a while back: Long words: Fascination Eye
Wonderful and translucent
Kisses from her lips
Short words (onesyllable) : When dogs dig for bones
They dig and dig and dig lots
Even smart dogs dig _____ Philosophical metaphoric Haikus of mine: He is a true friend Not without flaws - but still true "True" like arrow-flight Happy, not profound, Light of heart and not too deep Bird-flight not Swan-death Darkness is the night The day is also darkened By the acts of men _____ Love, Romance and Lust  I'm in love with love I'm in love with being in love Of this no good comes That girl heats my loins I feel driven by passion And she doesn't know! (Hee hee ;D) |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 9, 2005 21:49:28 GMT
your haikus they are
deep and very meaningful
how unlike my own
example: poking myself in the eye with a spoon, football results, doors in the wind, general non-meaningful things ;D
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 9, 2005 22:19:56 GMT
Lol ;D (that made me really laugh, thanks ) The temptation to write about Japanesey cherry blossom in wind is almost overwhelming. The trick to some Haiku's is "Yoda" speak. "Learn, you will!" Poetry about eye poking with spoons is valid as an art form! ;D (And poking badgers for that matter ...  ) |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 9, 2005 23:39:53 GMT
here comes the cheese: moonbeams, fragile, yet: delicately defiant glittering with hope corrrrrrrr! smell the cheesiness of that haiku!! |
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 9, 2005 23:48:51 GMT
;D Me like Me gusta! Got some dipthongs in there - heh. fragi~le etc. Nice imagery - not too cheesy at all - elemental even - encroaching on venerable Zen territory. (lol - I'm so full this stuff ;D) |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 10, 2005 0:11:33 GMT
feel free to shoot me
put me out of this mis'ry
never ending sleep
damn i wish that i
wasn't so damn negative
whoops said damn too much
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 10, 2005 0:36:55 GMT
Existential thought
Musing, we dwell in dark parts
Happy thoughts elsewhere
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Post by jodunford on Apr 10, 2005 0:50:45 GMT
oh how i miss my
sanity, longing for an
ounce of dignity
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 19, 2005 21:23:36 GMT
Moon bleeds mercury
Through portals on airy nights
Flows lovers' cold light [/b] [/center] |
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Post by jodunford on Apr 19, 2005 21:42:31 GMT
see yours are actually good. mine suck. badly. i appear to have haiku-block. like writers block, but cooler i shall inflict my crap haikuness on you all again soon! xxx |
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Post by Goblin King on Apr 19, 2005 21:52:52 GMT
Jo ! Your Haikus dont suck!! Some of them are wicked! Whats interesting is that after a while of writing them the language becomes more abstract - its is easier to break rules of grammar etc. Your "ounce of diginity" is a genius use of syllable count (also echoing and rhyming with sanity - creating a combination of western and eastern styles ) |
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