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Post by Goblin King on Feb 12, 2007 0:04:20 GMT
A sandy white sky gradually flushed blue as Mother Sun lolled, furtive, on the jagged horizon. An eerie twilight of dark green released it’s last jealous embrace on the day.
Martian sunsets reminded her of her own love affairs - those familiar, yet upside-down, romances.
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Post by lollipop on Feb 12, 2007 0:10:03 GMT
Deep and pretty at the same time. There's a lot of beautiful adjectives & adverbs in there!
But please remove that hideous apostrophe in the middle of its before I have a heart attack  |
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Post by Goblin King on Feb 12, 2007 0:19:03 GMT
apo-wha? I'm still dreaming of writing a sort of failed love story set partly in Barcelona and Mars.  |
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Post by Goblin King on Feb 12, 2007 0:20:04 GMT
"it's" ? is that the one? I'm such a word-klutz.
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Post by lollipop on Feb 12, 2007 0:23:09 GMT
Yeah, it's should be its. Yay! Do more writing! (God, I thought China was long distance!) |
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Post by Goblin King on Feb 12, 2007 22:44:03 GMT
 Yeah, at least in China there isn't a 40-120 minute delay on the phone (depending upon the time of year). |
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Post by lollipop on Feb 12, 2007 22:46:14 GMT
Have you seen Voices from a Distant Star. It's a short anime, about a couple who one of them goes on a deep-space mission (or to the outer stretches of the solar system or something) and then the other can't receive her messages for YEARS afterwards.
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Post by Goblin King on Feb 12, 2007 23:04:36 GMT
Sounds interesting, I may try to find it.
I'm looking into "human"-centred sci-fi - i.e. sci-fi settings but with fully fleshed characters - Cyberpunk touches on it but usually degenerates into gadget enhanced machismo, or just tribal aesthetics (well, the little I've read). The problem is I usually just end up writing drunk introspective monologues with bad metaphors and all the characters are broken ennui obsessed existentialists ...
One of the working titles was "Senet" which is the end-game the Pharoahs play - but that was all to do with sub-plot with an AI who was trying to gather as much ancient knowledge as possible - but the twist is just a bit too obvious/clichéd, too dramatic even. I may have to move away from omnipotent AIs - they have really been done to death.
*babbles incoherently about the plot of of the unwritten novel and yet doesn't have enough structure or strong narrative voice, or motivation... erm* Maybe should just babble like Burroughs and all the rest of them. Ha ha.
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Yeah, at least in China there isn't a 40-120 minute delay on the phone (depending upon the time of year).